1.23 Writing
conclusions
Just as your introduction
is the first impression your reader will have of your writing, your
conclusion is the last. A good conclusion will show that you have successfully
answered the question or completed the task set.
A good conclusion should:
be more than just a
summary. It should be a thoughtful end to a piece of writing; for example,
by applying what you have written to the outside world.
emphasize or reinforce
your main ideas, but with your ideas restated in a fresh way: don't
use the same language again. You should refer back
to your introduction, either with key words or parallel concepts and
images.
fit in with the rest
of the assignment. Different types of writing require different types
of conclusion. A short piece will probably not require
extensive restatement of your main points, whereas a longer piece probably
will.
perhaps include a provocative
question or two; evoke vivid images or use quotations if appropriate.
if appropriate, suggest
results or consequences or make a call for some sort of action.
make predictions or
suggest solutions, again if appropriate.
A good conclusion should NOT:
include completely new
ideas. If they're important, include them in your main text.
be apologetic! Be confident
with what you say: avoid phrases such as: "I may not be an expert
.." or "At least this is my opinion"
focus on minor points.
qualify the impact of
any previous points.
Many tutors would argue that the conclusion is the most important part
of your writing. It is where you can demonstrate once and for all that
you are in control of your ideas and material and that you have thought
of the implications and issues involved. Don't worry if writing your
conclusion leads you to re-writing other parts of your text. This is
in fact a good sign!
Example conclusions
These conclusions follow on from the sample introductions seen in Guide
1.22. It might be an idea to have a look at those and the accompanying
comments before reading these.
As with the introductions, imagine that you are studying the mass media
as part of your course and you have been set the following essay title:
Examine the sociological evidence of stereotypes of social groups
in the mass media. What are the causes of stereotyping in the mass media
and to what extent do they influence social attitudes?
Word limit: 2000 words
Keeping in mind the advice on writing conclusions, look at these three
attempts and make comments on them.
Example 1
My essay has looked, therefore,
at the problems caused by racial stereotyping, focussing on the lack
of ethnic minorities working in the mass media. It has been seen that
this bias causes a parallel bias in the interpretation of events. Indeed,
the problem is even more acute in the United States. According to a
survey conducted by the Pocock Institute (1998), only 7% of newspaper
staff are black or hispanic, which is totally unrepresentative of the
population as a whole.
Your comments: _______________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________
Example 2
I have done my best
to show in this essay that the mass media, and particularly television,
strengthens the various stereotypes in society, although at times in
very subtle, implicit ways. Several examples have been analysed, although
one or two of these were somewhat out of date. The essay also suggested
ways of overcoming this problem, although it is not clear if it is the
media which creates these stereotypes, or if it is merely reflecting
the way society already sees itself. The media is of course a part of
society as a whole. The question of positive discrimination was discussed
and it was decided that in the long run this has a negative effect.
Things will change, but only slowly.
Your comments: _______________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________
Example 3
It has been shown,
therefore, that stereotypes have always existed in society, and probably
will always do so. The mass media is a relatively recent phenomenon,
which is one reason for the widely differing views on its role in creating
and fostering stereotypical images. The actual causes of stereotyping
in the mass media have been shown to be surprisingly diverse, although
there can be no argument that any form of it which leads, albeit indirectly,
to suffering in any form must not be allowed to take place. It is society
itself which must stop this from happening, as laws and regulations
are often ineffective. Things are changing, though, and in some areas
very quickly; some commonplace stereotypes of only twenty years ago
and today virtually taboo. It is society which must indirectly control
the mass media, not vice versa. However, in an increasingly 'global'
world, controlled by fewer and fewer corporations and individuals eager
to please the governments of the major world powers, and, in the mass
media, who are more than willing to use stereotyping as a tool in the
control of society, we must be more and more vigilent to avoid this
cynical manipulation.
Your comments: _______________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________